Something I'm working on...

A bit more. Here, the young man is being interrogated after his friend went missing.

[Man]:
I don't know what he's thinking, if he knows...

[Woman]:
You're clutching your head, the top of your head - your eyes. You're
actually clutching your eyes.

[Man]:
I'm touching my temples.

[Woman]:
Why? What's happening?

[Man]:
It's like I'm trying to squeeze and keep whatever's inside, in. I
don't want it to come out.

[Woman]:
Why is that?

[Man]:
Because it would mean him finding out I was there. It would mean him
learning I saw the cages, and the girls. He'd kill me!

[shaking]

It would be - oh, my God, it would be so easy. This is the most
powerful man in our village, head of the most powerful family. He's
wealthy. He owns ships, practically royalty! It would be so incredibly
easy for him to make me disappear, and he wouldn't even have to make
it a secret. Just throw a bag of coins at my father's feet and take
me.

[Woman]:
So what do you do?

[Man]:
I say nothing.
 
Matiro said:
ACROSS my five lines of text,
TAKE into consideration not the whole line.
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Matiro all me see is perhaps a family of words across each sentence ( nice , good , friendly, thoughtful, and like ) Maybe you referring to the fruit of the spirit. I’ve sent your riddling ways down to Bletchley park for further analysis: ) I wish you nice day.
 
Prim90 said:
Matiro all me see is perhaps a family of words across each sentence ( nice , good , friendly, thoughtful, and like ) Maybe you referring to the fruit of the spirit. I’ve sent your riddling ways down to Bletchley park for further analysis: ) I wish you nice day.
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"ACROSS my five lines of text,
TAKE into consideration not the whole line."

My previous post offers Double hints.
My placing a hidden word within those 5 lines of text was based on my guess of your ethnicity.
 
Matiro said:
"ACROSS my five lines of text,
TAKE into consideration not the whole line."

My previous post offers Double hints.
My placing a hidden word within those 5 lines of text was based on my guess of your ethnicity.
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You mean the first letter of each sentence which comes to ( NIHAO. Meaning HELLO in Chinese 🇨🇳 How about ( HILOKAL ) my flavor be more Korean with a dab of Japanese and Caucasian
 
Prim90 said:
You mean the first letter of each sentence which comes to ( NIHAO. Meaning HELLO in Chinese 🇨🇳 How about ( HILOKAL ) my flavor be more Korean with a dab of Japanese and Caucasian
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SPOT ON.
Sorry, I thought you were Chinese (judging from your profile).

('ACROSS TAKE' hint at an acrostic)
 
LearningToLetGo said:
Here's part of something I'm working on about a young man who makes some really bad decisions. He's being interviewed by a woman years later who is interested in his story.



Man:
I'm sitting by the side of the path, begging, when some men from the
monastery walk by.

Woman:
Then what happens?

Man:
[After long pause]
I'm so weak. I'm only half in my body. I'm sitting there. I could be
dying. I don't know.

They see me and they don't talk. They're silent. They look at me and
say nothing while I look up at them and say nothing in response.

Woman:
All this time you have been begging on the streets, have you ever
talked to people?

Man:
I don't think I've spoken a word in years. I have no contact with
people. When I get shooed out of a place, I wander. I eat whatever
food I can find, berries, bark, insects, worms, dead animals. If I
can't find any food and I'm near people then I'll sit and put a cup
out and if they put food in my cup, or a coin then I use whatever they
give me. And if they pee on me and laugh at me or kick me to the
ground then I let them and move on.

I'm sitting on the ground by the monastery, half out of my body, ready
to die when they find me.

Woman:
They take you in?

Man:
[Softly]
They take me in...
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LearningToLetGo said:
A little more. This part is from the early pages of the story where the young man does some pretty shady things.

Man:
This was my idea. I wanted to do it, not him. He said it was a bad
idea but I told him I'd go alone if he didn't come with. I made him do
it.

Woman:
You feel responsible?

Man:
I am responsible. It's my fault.

Woman:
Now that you've witnessed him being beaten and taken inside, what do
you feel? Do you feel like it could've been you or that you're
supposed to be with him?

Man:
It's my fault... I am responsible.

Woman:
Is that all?

Man:
I'm... glad they caught him instead of me.

Woman:
Ah... I see.

Man:
I'm a monster, a wicked, evil monster! I'm... horrible. How can I be
glad they caught him and not me?

[long pause]

I'm grateful it wasn't me.

Woman:
How does it make you feel to say that?

Man:
Relief.
Guilt.
I'm a monster...

Woman:
What happens next? Do you ever see your friend again?

Man:
I never see him again, no one does. As far as anyone knows he just
disappeared.
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LearningToLetGo said:
A bit more. Here, the young man is being interrogated after his friend went missing.

[Man]:
I don't know what he's thinking, if he knows...

[Woman]:
You're clutching your head, the top of your head - your eyes. You're
actually clutching your eyes.

[Man]:
I'm touching my temples.

[Woman]:
Why? What's happening?

[Man]:
It's like I'm trying to squeeze and keep whatever's inside, in. I
don't want it to come out.

[Woman]:
Why is that?

[Man]:
Because it would mean him finding out I was there. It would mean him
learning I saw the cages, and the girls. He'd kill me!

[shaking]

It would be - oh, my God, it would be so easy. This is the most
powerful man in our village, head of the most powerful family. He's
wealthy. He owns ships, practically royalty! It would be so incredibly
easy for him to make me disappear, and he wouldn't even have to make
it a secret. Just throw a bag of coins at my father's feet and take
me.

[Woman]:
So what do you do?

[Man]:
I say nothing.
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Good morning, LearningToLetGo;

I'm following the story and connecting your 3 posts. I don't know if I did this right but am interested to see where the story goes.

God bless you and keep writing.

Bob
 
Matiro said:
"ACROSS my five lines of text,
TAKE into consideration not the whole line."

My previous post offers Double hints.
My placing a hidden word within those 5 lines of text was based on my guess of your ethnicity.
Click to expand...
Prim90 said:
You mean the first letter of each sentence which comes to ( NIHAO. Meaning HELLO in Chinese 🇨🇳 How about ( HILOKAL ) my flavor be more Korean with a dab of Japanese and Caucasian
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Matiro said:
SPOT ON.
Sorry, I thought you were Chinese (judging from your profile).

('ACROSS TAKE' hint at an acrostic)
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Prim90 said:
I can pass rather easy as a China doll too. I can be all things all : ) of which part of the Australia do you gravitate
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Matiro said:
Eastern.
And you?
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Prim90 said:
Matiro eastern meaning eastern state. That could be anywhere from NSW, Victoria to Timbuktu I be Queensland Brisbane
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Good morning, Matiro and Prim90;

Your posts are becoming a story within the story. lol!

I've never been to Australia and though I hear great things it's still a mystery to me.

Bob
 
bobinfaith said:
Good morning, Matiro and Prim90;

Your posts are becoming a story within the story. lol!

I've never been to Australia and though I hear great things it's still a mystery to me.

Bob
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Bob yes you right. Between the storyline and some acrostics thrown in. It has all the hallmarks of a potential Aussie tall story. Anywhere from the odd shot and the angry to the picnic at hanging rock and maybe they’re a weird bunch out there thrown here . Who knows what mysteries lurk out in the east. I not be one bit surprised if a bunyip pops up in the storyline : )
 
LearningToLetGo said:
A bit more. Here, the young man is being interrogated after his friend went missing.

[Man]:
I don't know what he's thinking, if he knows...

[Woman]:
You're clutching your head, the top of your head - your eyes. You're
actually clutching your eyes.

[Man]:
I'm touching my temples.

[Woman]:
Why? What's happening?

[Man]:
It's like I'm trying to squeeze and keep whatever's inside, in. I
don't want it to come out.

[Woman]:
Why is that?

[Man]:
Because it would mean him finding out I was there. It would mean him
learning I saw the cages, and the girls. He'd kill me!

[shaking]

It would be - oh, my God, it would be so easy. This is the most
powerful man in our village, head of the most powerful family. He's
wealthy. He owns ships, practically royalty! It would be so incredibly
easy for him to make me disappear, and he wouldn't even have to make
it a secret. Just throw a bag of coins at my father's feet and take
me.

[Woman]:
So what do you do?

[Man]:
I say nothing.
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Good.
Ideally if you make it a single document, that would be easier to read.
 
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